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The chart below shows the places in which UK people gained access to the internet from 1990 to 2004. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparisons where relevant. Rung

The chart below shows the places in which UK people gained access to the internet from 1990 to 2004. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparisons where relevant. Rung
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the charts give
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 about the location in which
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 logged in to the internet from 1998 to 2004.
overall
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as for
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the
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most
place
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have
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 people gained access to the internet
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 home and work vice versa.For the rest, colleges and libraries have almost flat traffic. in terms of internet access, Home
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 the most
connect
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,
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decreased from about 50% to nearly 45% of
user
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 from 1998 to 2000 and gradually increased from about 45% to 56% of people in the next 4
years
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. For traffic from
work
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 area, in the two
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 since 1998, it has been flat by about 28% and in the next four
year
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then
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 it has gone down sharply by about 18%.In the College location, it
almost
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 flat at 20% in the 4
years
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gone
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 down minimally by
to
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2% in the next 2
year
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.As for
library
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, in the first 2
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, it
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climbed slightly
of
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from 10% to nearly 17%
while
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2002, it declined from about 17% to 14% and balanced in the next 2
years
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Vocabulary: Replace the words years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 6 times.
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