More and more people are relying on their private cars as a major means of transportation. Describe some of the problems over resilience on cars can cause and suggest atleast one possible solution.

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In today's era, almost everyone has their own mode of transport which
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to travel. Every coin has two sides so it
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some pros and cons.
This
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essay will delve into various problems
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some ways to cure
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issue. First of all, nowadays people want to save more time. They have busy schedules and
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in
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so in order to save time they choose private
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instead
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of public transportation.
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, it creates various issues like traffic congestion, pollution, global warming, climate change and many more. Traffic congestion has become one of the main
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in today's world.
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conducted by reporters
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Sweden, 89%
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bought their own vehicles in
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five years.
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, the level of our natural resources
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as petrol and diesel
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to start decreasing.
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, our future generation cannot take the benefit of these resources. Statistics
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that merely 43% of petrol and 57% of diesel has left.
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, the cost of managing a private car is
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very high
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as fuel, insurance, maintenance and parking costs can be
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on a person 's shoulders. I strongly recommend that government should encourage
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to use public transportation services so that
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of issues can
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.
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, it is
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convenient and easy way to travel, not important
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anyone's life.
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Try to provide more specific examples and to explore solutions in more detail. This will make your arguments stronger and more convincing.
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Maintain a logical structure by ensuring smooth transitions between paragraphs and ideas. A more pronounced flow will enhance readability.
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Develop each point adequately rather than listing several problems with minimal explanation.
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Though the essay has a good introduction and conclusion, work on expanding the conclusion to summary key points discussed and future implications.
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The essay addresses relevant problems caused by the over-reliance on cars.
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The writer has a clear structure, with a clear introduction and conclusion, which helps the reader follow the main ideas.
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The essay includes factual data, such as statistics, to support its arguments which enhances credibility.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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