The pie chart provides a breakdown by type of transport and car in Edmonton with the table chart indicating whether the reason for using the car in city. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie chart provides a breakdown by type of transport and car in Edmonton with the table chart indicating whether the reason for using the car in city. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie chart above illustrates the amount of
car
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cars
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in Edmonton distinguished by it is
transport's
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transport
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type,
whereas
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, the table chart presents the percentages
on
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of
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reasons
of
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for
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people
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who intend to use their cars in the city.
Overall
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, both charts
are implying
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imply
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that most
people
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are using a car as their transportation to
commutes
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commute
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to work.
While
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,
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apply
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shopping and leisure activities
while
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commuting a bus and a taxi are done the least. In terms of type of transportation,
people
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are unlikely to commute with a bus and a taxi, as both are the lowest percentage at 10 per
cent
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. Followed by LRT at 35 per
cent
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, and
a
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apply
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car dominating at 45 per
cent
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.
Furthermore
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, the table chart shows that most
people
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are using transportation to commute to work. The second place is held by commuting for business at 45 per
cent
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, continued with parents taking their children to school at approximately 40 per
cent
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.
Then
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, the lowest goes to shopping and leisure activities, both at 15 per
cent
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words people, cent with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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