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The bar chart shows the percentage of adult male smokers in seven countries along with the world average in 2000 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart shows the percentage of adult male smokers in seven countries along with the world average in 2000 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph compares the total number of males who consume cigarettes in seven nations namely
Armenia
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, Egypt, Lebanon, Bangladesh, Cuba, Mexico, and Australia
as well as
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 the World between 2000 and 2015.
Overall
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, the majority of
smokers
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 were in
Armenia
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 population in 2000
then
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 followed by Cuba which had the same number of
smokers
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 as
Armenia
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 in 2015
whereas
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 the minority of the consumers were in Australia throughout the years.
To begin
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 with, the International average of
smokers
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 significantly dropped from 42% in 2000 to 32% in 2015.
Furthermore
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,
Armenia
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 society had a downward trend for smoking to 52% of users.
This
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 is followed by, Bangladesh, Mexico, and Australia were experienced a dramatic fall in
smokers
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 over the years, resulting in half of consumers from previous years. Meanwhile, Egypt and Lebanon significantly increased the number of
smokers
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, representing half of the population and above 40%, respectively. Interestingly, Cuba has slightly decreased from 53% men to 51% men.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words armenia, smokers with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • bar chart, percentage, adult male smokers
  • world average, increased, decreased
  • tobacco consumption, lung cancer
  • public health, awareness campaigns
  • government policy, smoking bans
  • health risks, nicotine, tobacco industry
  • chart analysis, data comparison
  • statistical trend, significant fluctuation
  • stagnation, steady rise, moderate fall
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