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Band 6.5

The graph shows Underground Station passenger numbers in London.

The graph shows Underground Station passenger numbers in London.
The given graph provides information about the numbers of Underground Station
passengers
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 in London throughout the time duration between 6
a.
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a.m.
m
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 and 10 p.
m
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. and
this
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 essay will describe and compare the number of subway
passengers
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.
Overall
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, there were 3 key time periods
such
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 as morning, afternoon and evening
where
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there
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 was a high stream of
passengers
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.
In contrast
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, at 4 p.
m
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. and 10
p.
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p.m.,
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m
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. the activity of metro users dramatically decreased. Focusing on significant changes, the intensive number of
passengers
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were
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was
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 noticed in
a
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apply
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rush hour at 8 o’clock almost 400 people in the morning and it gradually demolished at10 0’clock by 180 users of
subway
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the subway
a subway
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.
Additionally
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, it is worth noting that the density of
population
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the population
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 rises progressively in
the
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apply
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lunch time
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lunchtime
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. Looking at the other notable changes, at 16;00 the quantity of London Underground station stood 100 people and it starts to go up by 18;00 0’clock when people
finishes
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finish
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 their work and
going to
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go
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 home.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words passengers, m with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "numbers of" was used 3 times.
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