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The charts below show the main reasons for study among students of different age groups and the amount of support they received from employers.

The charts below show the main reasons for study among students of different age groups and the amount of support they received from employers.
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The first bar chart compares the percentage of two types of study motivations by
age
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, and the second bar chart shows information about employers’ investment of
time
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 and money
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in
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 different
age
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 groups. It could be inferred from the first graph that people tend to study more for interest than for career as
age
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 grows. From the second graph,
it is clear that
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 companies
support
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 younger generations under 26 years old the most in terms of
time
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 and fees. 80% of students with
age
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 under 26 study for their professions.
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, only less than 20% of their student cohort over 49 years old do so,
70
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and 70
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% of them,
instead
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, spend
time
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 studying for their interests. The proportions of studying driven by career and hobbies are the same for the
age
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 category 40-49, standing at 40%. Looking at the second graph, the
time
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 and financial
support
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 peaks at around 62% for
youngest
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the youngest
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 people, compared to those
who
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apply
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aged between 30 to 39, only 39% of them are receiving the
support
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. Interestingly, people from higher
age
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 groups are invested more, with 40% of those aged from 40 to 49, and almost 50% of those
who
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apply
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aged 49 or over, being provided with the same
support
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words age, time, support with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Lifelong learning
  • Professional development
  • Adult education
  • Career advancement
  • Personal enrichment
  • Academic pursuits
  • Upskilling
  • Reskilling
  • Educational attainment
  • Tuition reimbursement
  • Flexible work arrangements
  • Work-study balance
  • Financial assistance
  • Professional growth
  • Study leave
  • Employee retention
  • Workforce development
  • Time management
  • Self-improvement
  • Motivational factors
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