The diagram below show site of a school in 2004 and the plan for changes to school site in 2004

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The two maps demonstrate the design of a

school

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as it was in the year 2004 with a offered site design for the year 2024.

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, it is crystal clear that new venues

are

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will be

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constructed and

road

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the road

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will be

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widened in 2024 . Other modification is

addition

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the addition

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new

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a new

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school

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building and

to attend

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apply

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more pupils in the

school

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. In 2024 sports field will

have been

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replaced by

third

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a third

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school

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building. In the northeast

second

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the second

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car park will have been erected and below

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it,

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there will be

sports

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a sports

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field.

Other

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modification will be a short path connecting the two buildings together. Main road passes through two

school

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buildings from

main

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the main

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entrance to

second

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the second

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car park . In conclusion, there are

not

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changes to

main

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the main

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entrance and main car park.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

10 paragraphs

129 words

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