The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie chart presents the number of tourists to Ashdown Museum in the year before and after refurbishment. The data illustrates the proportion of survey tourists in satisfied times.
Overall
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, the total number of visitors is considerably surged after repair.
Additionally
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, the result shows the citizen's satisfaction, enjoyment and reviews about the museum.
To begin
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with, the figure for foreigners has climbed after refurbishment, to be specifically sooner contributed 74 000 and later is 92 000.
Likewise
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,
results
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the results
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of reviews are
also
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rising.
Moreover
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, there is a different pattern
can
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that can
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be seen in the survey the percentage of very satisfied
is
Verb problem
apply
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significantly
rise
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rose
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from 15% to
approxiamately
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approximately
a third.
On the other hand
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, anyway, a large proportion of residents choose dissatisfied and very satisfied which is chronic. Before
refurbishment
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the refurbishment
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, the lowest percentage is very satisfied with
four fifths
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four-fifths
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and after is 15%.
Furthermore
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, the survey of
satisfied
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satisfaction
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is
Verb problem
does
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not
changes
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change
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over the circumstances.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • refurbishment
  • visitor numbers
  • satisfaction levels
  • very satisfied
  • satisfied
  • neither satisfied nor dissatisfied
  • dissatisfied
  • very dissatisfied
  • survey results
  • comparison
  • impact
  • effectiveness
  • visitor experience
  • overall improvement
  • increase/decrease in visitors
  • positive feedback
  • negative feedback
  • visitor survey
  • survey period
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