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The table below gives information about changes in modes of travel in England between 1985 and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below gives information about changes in modes of travel in England between 1985 and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table chart below shows details about changes in
mode
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the mode
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 of travel by
miles
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 in England between 1985 and 2000 period.
Overall
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, the Car has the highest number in all years in
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 statistic. At the same time, the Taxi option has the lowest figure between 1985 and 2000.
Lastly
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, other ways of travel fluctuate with different
miles
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.
To begin
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 with, the Walking section was 255
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 per person.
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, it became 237
miles
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 after 15 years.
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, the Bicycle dropped by 20%. It started at 51 and changed to 41 in 2000.
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, the local bus scored 429
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 in the first year, after that, it decreased to 274
miles
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 in the second year.
On the other hand
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, the Taxi mode travel was only 13
miles
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 per person. But, it increased about three times in 2000.
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, the train and
long-distance-bus
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long-distance bus
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 jumped by a huge difference.
Lastly
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, the Other ways
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 up from 450 to 585 in 2000. totally, All modes elevated by 50% in 15 years.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "lastly".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words miles with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • passenger kilometres
  • modes of travel
  • dominant mode
  • lifestyle changes
  • economic factors
  • public transportation
  • urbanization
  • improved services
  • urban planning
  • safety concerns
  • societal attitudes
  • comparative analysis
  • transportation policy
  • public adoption
  • infrastructure
  • environmental concerns
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