You recently did a short coockery course. The coockery school has asked for your feedback on this course. Write a letter to the course director at rhe coockery school. In your letter describe what you enjoyed about the course say how much cooking you have done since the course suggest another coockery course you would like the school to offer

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Dear Sir or Madam, I hope

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letter finds you well. I am writing

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letter regarding the request for feedback about the cookery course which I recently attended at your institution.

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with, I have to say that I really enjoyed the course. I have been living alone, so I have to make food every day, and it was fun for me.

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, I learned many recipes from various countries

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as Italian food, Indian cuisine, Mexican food, and so on.

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, I have started combining all those learnings into practice.

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, since completing the course, I have consistently prepared dishes every day.

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, on weekends, I experiment with cuisines that are new to me. I would like to recommend that the school offer a cycle for people who want to learn professional cookery for 6 to 8 months. Thank you for all the learning. Best Regards, Pardis Ghobadi ---

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task achievement

Consider offering more specific examples of dishes or skills learned to enhance the richness of your response.

coherence and cohesion

Ensure each paragraph clearly addresses one part of the prompt and contains a single idea, which can enhance clarity.

task achievement

The letter maintains a polite and formal tone throughout, suitable for addressing a course director.

coherence and cohesion

Well-structured with a clear introduction, body, and conclusion, aiding reader understanding.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 9.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

9 paragraphs

152 words

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