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The chart below shows the amount of money given to developing countries from five organisations from 2008 to 2011. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.

The chart below shows the amount of money given to developing countries from five organisations from 2008 to 2011. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.
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The chart above illustrates the number of funds given to developing nations sourced by five various organisations in the years 2008 to 2011.
Overall
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, the most
money
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 was given by
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organisation
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Organisation
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 2 in the years 2010 and 2011.
On the other hand
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, the lowest amounts of funds were provided by
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organisation
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Organisation
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 4 throughout the years.
To begin
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 with, the most
money
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 given was 2.5
billion
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dollars
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 in 2011 by
organisation
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 2.
On the contrary
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,
organisation
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 4 provided the least amount of
money
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 in 2011 at 0.7
billion
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dollars
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. Followed by
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organisation
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Organisation
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 5 at 0.9
billion
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dollars
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.
Furthermore
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, in 2010,
organisation
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 2 remained the highest provider at 2.4
billion
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. Continued with
organisation
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 3 at 1.8
billion
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. The three other organisations detained the lowest source at 0.5
billion
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, with the exception of
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organisation
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 1 at 0.7
billion
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dollars
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. In terms of the year 2009,
organisation
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 3 held the highest amount. Next in line is
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organisation
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Organisation
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 2 at 1.5
billion
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nad
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and
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organisation
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Organisation
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 1 at 0.9
billion
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dollars
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. The rest organisations only contributed below 0.7
billion
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 amount of funds.
Moreover
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, in 2008,
organisation
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 4
has
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donated more
money
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 than their next donations at 0.75
billions
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billion
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.
However
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,
organisation
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 3 remained the highest donator.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words money, organisation, billion, dollars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "provided" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amounts" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • amount of money
  • developing countries
  • organisations
  • from 2008 to 2011
  • given to
  • funding
  • analyze
  • examine
  • discuss
  • evaluate
  • explore
  • highlight
  • summarize
  • trends
  • data
  • chart
  • purpose
  • overview
  • key findings
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