People living in the 21st century have a better life quality than people who lived in previous times. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Some
individuals
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tend to believe that our modern century provides
people
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much
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with many
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more advantages compared to past ones and
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individuals
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life
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standards are significantly better nowadays.I definitely support
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with, we can’t ignore the fact that since technology improved massively in the
last
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decades our world has become a better place.100 years ago
people
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have
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lived in difficult situations and the main reason for
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there were viral diseases that doctors couldn’t find logical solutions
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,
people
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were dealing with enormous wars and the stress level was really hard for them to handle.
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that, when we consider that
these kind
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of negative outcomes appeared in those days it is reasonable to think that the level of issues
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face recently is much
more
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less than the previous centuries.
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, most of the nations improved their social facilities and increased their citizens' financial status.
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,
people
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can reach the hospitals easily when they get ill or when they get a disease because major developments have been made in the health system in recent years and the amount of
life
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expectancy
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gradually risen.Unlike past times, with the new investments made in transportation reaching
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other cities and countries have become much
comfortable.İn
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more comfortable.İn
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order to that,
people
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can save time with
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development and explore other places without worrying.
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, right now human beings can communicate with other
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any
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time with the help of smartphones and can be able to access information about the news happening worldwide. İn conclusion, since new inventions and developments came up in these modern days I personally believe that the range of human
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quality has developed and currently
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fewer
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people
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are suffering in their daily
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life
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lives
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.
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While the essay provides a complete response, including more specific examples would strengthen your argument and better illustrate the advancements in quality of life.
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The introduction clearly states your position, setting a strong foundation for your argument.
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You included a concise conclusion that reinforces your stance, effectively wrapping up your argument.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Quality of life
  • Technological advances
  • Healthcare systems
  • Life expectancy
  • Information access
  • Digital tools
  • Comfort and convenience
  • Modern conveniences
  • Mental health
  • Environmental degradation
  • Urbanization
  • Human rights
  • Social advancement
  • Life satisfaction
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