The graph below shows how elderly people in the United States spent their free time between 1980 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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data about activities elderly people did in the United States during the period from 1980 to 2010.

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, it can be seen that activities

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as reading, hiking and surfing the internet experienced

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growth through

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timeline, despite some fluctuation.

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and watching TV declined or remained

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approximately the same level. The percentage of hiking started at 20% and experienced a fourfold increase in these 30 years, having no fluctuation. Trends of reading and surfing the internet,

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, were more dynamic. There was a slight increase in reading to roughly 40% in the 1990s

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before it underwent a drop. At

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point, both reading and surfing the internet saw a sharp increase from the 2000s to the remainder of the period. Watching TV stood at 60% in

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and had a gradual rise for 20 years.

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, it declined back approximately to the level of

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proportion

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went downward in

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the 1990s

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and raised back.

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, the 2010s ratio was 5% lower than at the beginning, showing an

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drop.

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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "drop" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

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Task Achievement: 9.0

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3 paragraphs

185 words

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