The graph below shows the hospital admissions for five hospitals in a European country from 2004 to 2018.

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The line graph illustrates how many weekly hospital

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there were in Fortsmith, Adlin, Stanton, Bardley and Oxley, which are hospitals located in a European country, between 2004 and 2018.

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, for most of the period given Bardley had the most

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while

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Stanton had the least. Oxley was the only hospital to see a decline in

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and Fortsmith was unique in that their admission figures remained relatively stable over the period.

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to all other hospitals increased during the years given.

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to Oxley

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started at just under 250 a week in 2004 but more than halved by the final year (just over 100

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). Fortsmith weekly hospital

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fluctuated at around 200 for the whole period.

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, the number of people admitted to Adlin

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rose dramatically from just over 100 in the first year to 250 by 2018.

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, Bardley

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saw a rise from 200 to peak at over 250, the highest for any hospital. In terms of Stanton

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, only approximately 70 people were admitted in 2008 and

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gradually climbed to slightly over 150 in 2018.

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The graph below shows the hospital admissions for five hospitals in a European country from 2004 to 2018.

Nowadays, many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or oganisation. Why might be the case? What could be the disadvantages of being self-employed?

Some people believe that mining resources in space will be the key to solving Earth's resource shortages, while others argue that it poses significant risks and challenges. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

some people think that using animals for experimentation purpose is cruel, but other people think that it is necessary for the development of science. Discuss both view and your opinion.

Government investment in the arts,such as music and theatre is a waste of money. Government must invest this money in public service instead. Do you agree or disagree.

Freedom of speech is necessary in a free society. Agree or Disagree? Give reasons for your answer.