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the graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004. Summarise the information below by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

the graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004. Summarise the information below by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
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The line graph shows the changes in demand
of
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 different types of meat in Europe between 1979 and 2004. The measurements that are used in the graph are
grams
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 consumed per
person
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 each
week
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.
Overall
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, since 1979, the most
beef
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 has been consumed per
person
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,
however
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, its
popularity
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 has declined since 1989. The
popularity
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 of
chicken
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, in turn, increased from 1989 to 2004.
Fish
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 was at the same level without dramatic fluctuations, and lamb was the least popular type of meat, which
also
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 declined in rating.
Chicken
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 and
beef
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 were gaining the most
popularity
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. The
chicken
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 index increased from 150 to 250
grams
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 per
person
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 per
week
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 from 1979 to 2004, which almost doubled the first indicator.
Beef
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 in about 1984 ranged between 200 and 250
Grams
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 per
person
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 per
week
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. After 1989, its rate dropped significantly.
Thus
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, the
chicken
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 prevailed over the
beef
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.
Fish
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 and lamb were not as popular as
beef
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 and
chicken
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.
However
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, in 1979, lamb was on par with
chicken
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 and the average was 150
grams
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 per
person
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 per
week
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. By 2004, its rate had dropped to about 50. The
popularity
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 of
fish
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 did not change and always remained around 50
grams
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 per
person
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 per
week
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. The
popularity
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 of
fish
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 has decreased slightly. Its indicator was always around 50
grams
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 per
person
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 per
week
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words grams, person, week, beef, popularity, chicken, fish with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption
  • metric tons
  • fluctuations
  • upward/downward trend
  • stabilize
  • peak
  • trough
  • overtake
  • steady decline/increase
  • sustainable
  • dietary habits
  • preferences
  • health consciousness
  • per capita
  • poultry
  • veal
  • stagnant
  • gradual
  • surpass
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