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The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for maaking sugar from sugar cane. Sumrnarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparions where relevent

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for maaking sugar from sugar cane. Sumrnarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparions where relevent
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The diagram presents the protocol for producing
sugar
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 from
sugar
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 cane
step
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 by
step
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. The manufacturing process has 7 steps.
Overall
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, the process starts with planting seeds, harvesting, crushing, purifying
juice
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, making
syrup
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, centrifuging, and drying-cooling.
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, 12 or 18 months wait for mature
sugar
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 canes.
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 the
sugar
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 cane should harvested whether by industrial way or manual human hand. After the collection, the
sugar
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 cane is crushed
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due
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apply
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to collect
sugar
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juice
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.
Furthermore
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, for the purifying
juice
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, the extract is put into a limestone filter. Next
step
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, pure
juice
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 is carried to the evaporator
owing
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to get
syrup
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. After that stage, the
syrup
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 is put into a centrifuge machine in order to collect pure
syrup
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. Namely, in
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step
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, all the
sugar
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 crystals separate from
syrup
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.
Finally
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, the homogenous
syrup
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put
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 into the bowl in order to dry and cool
syrup
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,
besides
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 after the cooling time the
syrup
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become
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became
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sugar
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 for collection

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sugar, step, juice, syrup with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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