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Many people believe that scientific research should be carried out and controlled by gorvernments rather than private companies. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Today, scientific experimentation plays a pivotal role in our lives
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 its contribution to technology and innovation. Some people believe that
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 should conduct these studies
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 of private
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.
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, I disagree with
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 viewpoint and discuss it in the following essay. On the one hand, there are several reasons why people think that
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 should play the leading role in undertaking
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 analysis. The analysis's results of private
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 are thought to be unreliable since their primary aim is to boost profit.
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, some pharmaceutical
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 published false findings about their product for the sake of selling more products, which has contributed to the great threat and mistrust about medicine in the community.
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, without the ministry's control, a wide range of unethical experiments have been carried out by exposing people and animals to chemical and biological substances
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 their health day by day.
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, I believe that there are many good things that come from the scientific studies of private
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. Encouraging private
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 studies may boost the innovation of a country since they have to be innovative to compete with their rivals by trying to do the most valuable experiments. Take Apple,
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, which is the first company to produce wireless Bluetooth earphones, called AirPods yielding more comfort to society. The community,
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, benefits a lot from new inventions in a spectrum of fields. In conclusion, I would argue that both private
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 and politics should be involved in carrying out scientific
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 to bring benefits to society.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Scientific research
  • Government oversight
  • Public interest
  • Ethical guidelines
  • Conflicts of interest
  • Profit motives
  • Funding stability
  • Long-term benefits
  • Transparency
  • Collaboration
  • Competitive advantage
  • Public health crises
  • Climate change
  • Bureaucratic inefficiencies
  • Innovation
  • Competitive environment
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