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The chart below shows information about three different deserts around the world.

The chart below shows information about three different deserts around the world.
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These tables provide key information about the
desert
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 which
classified
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is classified
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for
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 three types
such
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 as
Sahara
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Desert
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, Taklimakan
Desert
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, and Great Basin
Desert
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. these units are measured in km, cm,
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and c
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c
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.
Overall
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, it is clear from the graph that
size
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the size
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 of
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Sahara
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the Sahara
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Desert
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 is
a
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the
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 largest
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sahara
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Sahara
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 in the world.
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, the highest
number of
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apply
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the
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apply
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average annual rainfall in Africa, correspondingly the Taklimakan
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 has a
fewer
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lower
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 percentage
from
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of
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 rainfall.
According to
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 what is shown, the size area of the Great Basin
Desert
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305,775
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is 305,775
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 sq km than
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Sahara
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the Sahara
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Desert
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 and Taklimakan
Desert
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. The
avarage
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average
 of
tempereture
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temperature
 between 25c in the summer and -9c in the winter in
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the tyaklimakan
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tyaklimakan
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Tyaklimakan
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Desert
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,
while
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another
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in another
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desert
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 the
tempreture
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temperature
 ranges
betwwen
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between
 30c in the summer and -8c to 13c in the winter respectively. in terms of
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the desert
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desert
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deserts
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 in
north
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North
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 America and Africa the
tempreture
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temperature
 extremely recorded
58c
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at 58c
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- 57c respectively,
wheras
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whereas
 in
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desert
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the desert
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 of Asia was lowest recoded to -26.1c.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words desert, sahara, c with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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