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In many countries nowadays, consumers can go to a supermarket and buy food produced all over the world. Do you think this is a positive or negative developmen

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These days,
people
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 can go to a supermarket and buy
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productions
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products
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 which they want to buy around the
word
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world
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.
This
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 trend is popular and common in the
word
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world
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. In my opinion, I support,
this
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 trend in a positive
development
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 in the world. It can promote cultural communication and economic
development
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. On the one hand,
people
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finding
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 the
produced
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produce
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 from other countries in their supermarkets is
benefit
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a benefit
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 to economic
development
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. As far as we all know,
people
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 are into exploring the new thing, when they find there
are
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 something new in their shops, they want to buy
and
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it and
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 have a try. It is an action to increase the
willing
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of
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 consume from other countries and promote the export
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products
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of products
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.
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, it is
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 a good form to promote
the
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apply
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culture
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 communication. When
people
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 find the
inport
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import
products
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 are suitable for them, they will
become
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 to explore the cultures of other countries.
People
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 will find the
different
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difference
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 between them. Even,
some
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if some
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people
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 want to travel abroad for a trip, it will
also
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 effort the the
development
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 of travel industry, especially
products
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 which can not
product
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produced
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 in their country, they are prefer to
exploring
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 them in their headstream.
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,
people
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 may think that
this
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 trend will make nations have no difference
about
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 their shops.
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, in
this
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 case,
people
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 can make the creative of
productions
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. They can make the
productions
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 more and more suitable for
people
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's needs. In conclusion, companies want to export some
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productions
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products
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 to increase their income, it is a positive
development
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. It can make
people
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's
live
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lives
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 more and more comfortable and convenient.
People
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 want to export some new
products
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as well as
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 problems.
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Content
You offered some interesting insights on how imported products promote cultural communication and economic growth.
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You recognized and attempted to address potential counterarguments, which adds depth to your response.

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