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Band 3

The plans below show a harbour in 2000 and how it looks today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The two maps
illustrates
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 that the plans below show a harbour in 2000 and how it looks today.
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 the maps, we can see there are a
little
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differents
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differences
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 between Porth Harbour in 2000 and today. In 2000, There was a Marina that was a private
yachts
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 near Showers&
toilels
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toilets
 and
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the north
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north
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North
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Car
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park
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Park
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. These days, Fishing boats
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 of Marina. In 2000, There was only a bigger south
Car
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 park near
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the
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Road. But it
add
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 a Showers & toilets on between two
Car
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 parks,
meanwhile
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suoth
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south
Car
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 park is linked with
Main
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 road.In 2000, there was one dock next
the
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 Public
beach
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,
however
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, there
bulit
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built
 a new Dock near the old one. Meanwhile, There
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also
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increase
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an increase
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a
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the
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Cafe
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Cafes
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 and shops on the west of the Lifeboat. About
thedisused
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the disused
disused
 castle and the
beach
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, hotels
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 of castles and the
beach
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 changed from a public
beach
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 to a private
beach
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 belonging to the hotel. In
conclusin
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conclusion
, the facilities of Porth Harbour are becoming more and more perfect.
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Coherence & Cohesion
Work on organizing your paragraphs more clearly. Consider using separate paragraphs to cover different aspects or features of the maps and ensure each paragraph flows smoothly to the next.
Task Achievement
Make sure each main feature is supported by detailed descriptions. Adding more comparisons and contrasts can strengthen your response and show a deeper analysis of changes.
Clarity
Try to be more concise and clear in your descriptions, ensuring your ideas are communicated effectively without wordiness or repetition.
Structure
The essay has a good introduction and conclusion, which helps to frame the response well.
Task Achievement
You've identified and mentioned the main changes that took place between 2000 and today in Porth Harbour.
Coverage
The response covers a variety of aspects from the maps, indicating a reasonable understanding of the differences between them.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • harbour (or harbor)
  • docks
  • shipping lanes
  • warehouses
  • recreational areas
  • infrastructure
  • additions
  • removals
  • facilities
  • environmental sustainability
  • economic impact
  • local community
  • capacity
  • technological advancements
  • industrial shipping
  • recreational use
  • surrounding infrastructure
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