The graph below gives information from a 2008 report about consumption of energy in the USA since 1980 with projections until 2030.

The graph below gives information from a 2008 report about consumption of energy in the USA since 1980 with projections until 2030.
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The graph illustrates how much six different fuel used in the USA from 1980 to 2030.
Overall
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, the most fuel used is petrol and oil,
while
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the least of citizens in the USA used hydropower from 1980 until prediction in 2030.
Firstly
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, the proportion of Petrol and oil increased and reached a peak of the highest from 35 quadrillion in 1980 to around 45 quadrillion in 2030.
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, the consumption of coal significantly increased and reached second place the highest from 15,000
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to around 30,000
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. Meanwhile, the proportion of consumption natural gas had little increased from 20,000
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in 1980 and predicted in 2030 will steady around 25,000
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.
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, both nuclear and solar/wind energy had little growth from less than 5,000
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in 1980 to more than 5,000
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in 2030 (nuclear) and around 5,000
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for solar/wind.
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Hydropower power decreased from 4,000
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to 3,000
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words units with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Energy consumption
  • Renewable resources
  • Non-renewable resources
  • Fossil fuels
  • Nuclear power
  • Hydroelectric power
  • Solar energy
  • Wind energy
  • Biomass
  • Consumption patterns
  • Technological advancements
  • Energy efficiency
  • Sustainable development
  • Carbon footprint
  • Energy policy
  • Projections
  • Decade
  • Significant shifts
  • Economic factors
  • Environmental impact
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