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Writing Samples
Band 5

in the future, nobody Will buy printed newspapers or books because they Will be able to read everything they want online without paying. TO what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement

#future #nobody #newspapers #books
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In
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the contemporay
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contemporay
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contemporary
 world,
the
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an
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 increasing number of
people
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 using online reading
materials
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 rather than
read
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reading
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the
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printed products.
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, a group of
people
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beleieve
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believe
 that in the future everyone will be able to read everything they want online without paying,
instead
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purchase
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purchasing
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 printed
materials
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such
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 as newspapers or
books
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. I totally agree, since the online reading trend is more
usefull
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useful
 and the
companies
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 will
choose
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 produce more online
materials
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due to
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 high benefits. First of all, online reading has numerous
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beneficial
 advantages,
such
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saving
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as saving
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 time and
efforts
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effort
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.
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, the
researchs
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research
researchers
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shows
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 that a high proportion of
people
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perefers
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prefers
prefer
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a kindle
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kindle
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 rather than
books
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 when they travel. They
dont
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don't
 need to carry heavy
books
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,
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moreover
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moreover,
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 ındividuals can easily and quickly reach all
type
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types
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 of
books
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 and news around the world with
help
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the help
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 of
this
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 tool.
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, when
people
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was bought
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buy
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 any reading item they must
whether
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apply
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go and buy from
market
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the market
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 or purchase from online shopping,
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, it
is saving
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 time and
pysical
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physical
 effort.
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 landscape is high profit for the relevant
companies
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,
produce
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producing
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paper based
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materials
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 is very expensive and hard.
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, in the
produce
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 process the
companies
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paying
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 a lot of money for employees and
other expenduture thing
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another expenduture thing
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such
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 as
electric
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 and machine expenses, The big
compamies
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companies
such
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 as
National
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the National
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geograph
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collecting
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collect
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 funds for their magazines,
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 without
machine
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machines
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 or other
type
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types
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expenses
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of expenses
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 all money
become
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becomes
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 to high income to the company. Because of that online reading is
also
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benefical
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beneficial
 for
the
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apply
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companies
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. To
sump
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sum
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 up, a
noticiable
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noticeable
 proportion
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people
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of people
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 think that ın the future nobody will buy printed reading
materials
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, and they will be able to read everything they want online. In my view,
online
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the online
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 trend is more
helpfull
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helpful
to save
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in saving
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 time and
also
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benefical
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beneficial
 for
the
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apply
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companies
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.
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task achievement
To excel in task achievement, ensure your arguments are developed with adequate support and specific examples. Adding more detailed examples would reinforce your points.
coherence cohesion
In terms of coherence and cohesion, try refining transitions between supporting points to ensure they flow logically and clearly. Ensure each paragraph links well to the main thesis.
task achievement
The introduction clearly states your position regarding the topic, which is crucial for task response.
coherence cohesion
Your essay has a clear structure with an introduction and conclusion, contributing to coherence and cohesion.
task achievement
You identified significant advantages of online reading, showcasing the core argument effectively.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • convenience
  • cost-effective
  • cultural value
  • sentimental value
  • reliability
  • distracting
  • access to
  • digital devices
  • internet
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