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The bar chart presents the medium increase of home production in rich states that have adapted an internatinoal approach to business and countries that have not.

The bar chart presents the medium increase of home production in rich states that have adapted an internatinoal approach to business and countries that have not.
The bar chart presents the medium
increase
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of
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in
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 home production in rich
states
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 that have
adapted
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adopted
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 an
internatinoal
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international
 approach to business and
countries
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 that have not.
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, it can be clearly seen that a decline in the annual
growth
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 of the Gross Domestic Product of rich
states
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 and
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increase
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an increase
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 in the
per
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per-year
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year
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growth
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 of the Gross Domestic Product of Globalisers.
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 the bar
chart
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 the
growth
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 of
Wealth
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countries
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 was almost 5%
to
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apply
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per
year
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 and the
increase
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 of
Non-Globalisers
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 was above 2%.{not up to 2.5%}, as for business
states
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theirs
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growth
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 was almost 1.5% a
year
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 in the 1960s. In
1970s
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the 1970s
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, The
GDP
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growth
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 of rich
states
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was remained
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remained
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to
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at
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 almost 3%
to
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apply
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annual
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annually
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 and the per
year
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increase
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 of the Globalisers
to reach
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reached
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 almost 3% and their
growth
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 was the same as that of rich
countries
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. The annual
growth
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 of
Non-Globalisers
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 was higher than 3%. In
1980s
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the 1980s
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, the annual
growth
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 of the
Non-Globalisers
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it
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apply
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was not even 1% and
GDP
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 decreased by 2% compared to
last
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years
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.
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GDP
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The GDP
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 of Wealth
states
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 decreased again and it was slightly above 2%.
GDP
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 the
growth
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 of Business
states
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 grew again and exceeded 3%. In
1990s
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the 1990s
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,
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GDP
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the GDP
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increase
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 of the rich
states
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 fell again and was 2%. Home Production of
Non-Globalisers
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 grew back and it was almost 1.5%. The greatest
growth
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 of Home Production was observed in the Globalizing
countries
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 and their
growth
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 was almost 5% (4.9%) in
1990s
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the 1990s
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words increase, states, countries, growth, year, non-globalisers, gdp with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "presents" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 11 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 6 times.
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