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The chart below gives information about European people of different age groups who went to gyms once a month or more between 1990 and 2010.

The chart below gives information about European people of different age groups who went to gyms once a month or more between 1990 and 2010.
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The line graph shows data about different
aged
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 European citizens who participated
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gym
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in gym
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 activities one or more times in a month between 1990 and 2010.
Overall
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, all age groups saw an increase on going
gym
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 exercises.
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gym
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the gym
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 was widespread more in
18
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the 18
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-24 class, in
45+
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the 45+
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 classification it was least famous. Starting with
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-24 category, in 1990, nearly 10% of them went to the
gym
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. In 1998, their proportion got higher at almost 30%. Their peak was at approximately 60% in 2006. By 2010 their stats bit decreased at 50%. As young generation, 25-34 aged adult’s status was at 10% in 1990.
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, in 20 years, more individuals who were 25-34 started to
went
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gym
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the gym
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 at 50%. Regarding 35-44,
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 5% of them chose
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gym
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the gym
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 in 1990, until 2002,
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gym
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the gym
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 was popular among 20% of them. In 2010, their amount number
become
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 greater at 40%. In 45+ generation experienced
maximum
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a maximum
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20
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of 20
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%
gym
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 participation.
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