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The graph below shows the total amount of waste produced by cities and towns of six countries in 1980, 1990 and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the total amount of waste produced by cities and towns of six countries in 1980, 1990 and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph presents how much waste was produced in six countries between the
years
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 1980, 1990 and 2000.
Overall
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, the table makes clear that, proportionally, the amount of waste
production
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 throughout the
years
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had
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has
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 increased, except in countries
such
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Korea
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as Korea
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 and Poland. Looking closely at Japan, Korea and Ireland, it is possible to observe that over the
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 the
production
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 has increased,
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however
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however,
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 Korea reversed
this
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 trend, decreasing its wasting
production
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 in
millions
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 of
tonnes
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 by the end of the period
in
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by
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 19% in comparison
at
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to
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 31% in 1990. In
constrant
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contrast
, Ireland started with 20% in 1980 and jumped to 52% in
millions
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 wasted in 2000.
Nonetheless
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, Japan is the only country with low numbers, starting with 8% in 1980, reducing to zero in 1990, and slightly climbing to 3%
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millions
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million
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of
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apply
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tonnes
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 in 2000. Portugal, Poland, and the USA
,
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 followed a similar trend, growing
up
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apply
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in
wasting
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waste
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production
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 over the
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,
however
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, Poland modestly reduced
his
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its
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wasting
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waste
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 in 2000
at
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to
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 9% in
millions
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 of
tonnes
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comparing
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 to 10% in 1990.
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, Polland gradually rose its
production
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thorugh
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through
 the
years
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. The United is the largest producer of waste, it started with 141% in
millions
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 of
tonnes
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 and rocked to 256% in 2000.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words years, production, millions, tonnes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • trend
  • upward trend
  • downward trend
  • figures
  • levels
  • significant increase
  • significant decrease
  • rate of change
  • deviate
  • shift
  • economic development
  • population growth
  • waste management policies
  • disparity
  • comparison
  • fluctuation
  • observe
  • examine
  • highlight
  • noteworthy
  • peak
  • low point
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