In many countries people are now living longer than ever before. Some say an ageing population creates problems for governments. Other people think there are benefits if society has more elderly people. To what extent do the advantages of having an ageing population outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.

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population are incomparable with its drawbacks. first of all, having an aged community means that there are a lot of people with experience in a variety of fields. These people have been working in different sectors for years and have faced various circumstances. Governments and private companies can utilize
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and the hardships they faced to their grandchildren.
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Include more specific examples or data to strengthen your arguments and make the essay more compelling.
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The essay presents a clear position and addresses both sides of the argument, which adds depth to the discussion.
coherence cohesion
The conclusion is concise and effectively summarizes the main points of the essay, reinforcing the writer's stance.
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The essay uses a logical structure, with a clear introduction, body paragraphs that support the thesis, and a coherent conclusion.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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