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Band 4.5

In the past it was only possible to contact people at home by letter or telephone. Nowadays, mobile devices mean that we can communicate with people anywhere and at any time. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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 for several main reasons. perhaps the most important is that. the mobile has
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suitable
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published
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 conclusion.
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benefits
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Coherence and Cohesion
Work on organizing your essay in a logical structure with clear paragraphs. The use of paragraphs to separate different points and arguments can significantly improve coherence and cohesion.
Task Achievement
Make sure your essay directly addresses the topic throughout. It's important to maintain focus on the advantages and disadvantages throughout your discussion.
Task Achievement
Provide more detailed and relevant examples to support your arguments. Specific examples can strengthen your points and make your argument more convincing.
Coherence and Cohesion
The conclusion summarizes your stance clearly, reinforcing the main argument of the essay.
Task Achievement
Good attempt to discuss both sides of the argument, acknowledging advantages and disadvantages.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Connectivity
  • Geographical boundaries
  • International audience
  • Social movements
  • Convenience
  • Flexibility
  • Emergency contacts
  • Productivity
  • Information accessibility
  • Dependency
  • Over-reliance
  • Face-to-face interactions
  • Privacy issues
  • Work-life boundaries
  • Uninterrupted personal time
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