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The charts below give information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050.

The charts below give information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050.
The four pie charts compare the percentages of three different age groups in two countries (Yemen and Italy) in 2000 and predict 2050.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 elderly
people
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held
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 the highest percentage of all citizens in Yemen,
while
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 it is expected to see growth in the number of
people
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 who are aged from 15 to 59 and take the lead. Most of the individuals in Italy
were
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 aged from 15 to 59 and are predicted to remain the same in the future. In 2000, elderly
people
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 were the majority of Yemen's citizens, exactly half of the population,
whereas
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people
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 aged from 15 to 59 were well below that (46.3%).
In contrast
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, in Italy, elderly
people
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 were just below a quarter (24.1%), with most citizens aged from 15 to 59. Moving on to 2050,
this
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 accounted for quite similar proportions for both countries. Fifty-seven
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 of the population is projected to be from the age group 15 to 59.
Similarly
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, Italy is predicted to have
people
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 aged from 15 to 59 as their majority.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • age demographics
  • age structure
  • population distribution
  • youthful population
  • ageing population
  • life expectancy
  • birth rate
  • demographic shift
  • population projection
  • median age
  • dependents
  • working-age population
  • elderly dependents
  • geriatric
  • fertility rate
  • migration
  • demographic trends
  • baby boomers
  • demographic dividend
  • population pyramid
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