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A growing number of people rely or restaurants and convenience food (Frozen food and packaged meals) rather than home-cooked food to supply most of their meals. What are the advantages and disadvantages of eating this way?

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Food
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 is one of the most basic needs for humans to live a better life. Despite that, recently, many individuals have been eating from restaurants or packed
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instead
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 of preparing
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 at home. There are several merits
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 as it saves a
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 of
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 spent on meal preps
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 the demerits like it is an inadequate source of essential minerals, vitamins, and proteins. Both advantages and disadvantages are
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 explained in the letter. Several benefits can be put forth in favour of eating readily available meals. The primary reason is that it saves a
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 of
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 preparation
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 as these foods are ready to eat. Because these meals are pre-cooked and have a longer shelf life, they can be enjoyed
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anytime
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time
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 anywhere.
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, if a person takes
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a portion of food
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 from a restaurant in the morning
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 it can
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 be eaten in the afternoon as a lunch and at night as a dinner which saves a decent amount of
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 for preparing and planning
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the meal and cleaning utensils.
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, the negative effects of
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 newly emerged trend should not be overlooked. The predominant reason is that the
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 served in restaurants or in the packaging is often not a sufficient source of vital body elements
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 as protein and nutrients
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 contains a
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 of preservatives to longer the shelf life.
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 creates life-threatening diseases
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 as cancer and sometimes less serious but hard-to-control health issues like obesity, and diabetes. The recent study published by the University of Toronto is the perfect example of
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, it mentioned that more than 80% of people who
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 are more prone to getting serious health-related issues from a very young age, especially those under 30 years.
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,
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 packed meals or restaurants do save a
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 of
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 in
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 prep, it's not a healthy option as they do not provide the balanced
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 that the body requires to function properly. So, individuals should make their own
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according to
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 their preferences at home.

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While you have provided a clear response, consider adding more varied examples or statistics to strengthen the argument further.
coherence cohesion
Make sure to clearly separate the advantages and disadvantages into distinct paragraphs to improve clarity.
coherence cohesion
Your introduction and conclusion are clear and effectively frame the essay.
coherence cohesion
The essay is logically structured and flows well from one point to the next.
task achievement
You support your points with specific examples, which enhances your argument.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • convenience food
  • processed food
  • nutritional value
  • high-calorie
  • sodium content
  • dietary needs
  • budget constraints
  • culinary skills
  • health implications
  • time management
  • professional chefs
  • meal preparation
  • varied cuisine
  • unhealthy fats
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