The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008.
The bar charts illustrate what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time
work
did after leaving college in 2008.
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Overall
, the Linking Words
number
of graduates was higher than the Use synonyms
number
of postgraduates. It is noticeable that Use synonyms
both
the figures for Use synonyms
further
study were the highest Linking Words
figure
. Fix the agreement mistake
figures
In contrast
, Linking Words
both
the figures for voluntary Use synonyms
work
were the lowest figure. Use synonyms
In addition
, the Linking Words
number
of part-time Use synonyms
work
was second order and the Use synonyms
number
of Use synonyms
unemployment
was third order in Replace the word
unemployed
both
students.
Turning the graph in more detail, Use synonyms
while
the gap Linking Words
of
Change preposition
between
further
study and part-time Linking Words
work
in graduates was big about 12,000, the gap Use synonyms
in
postgraduates was small about 1,100. Change preposition
between
In other words
, in graduates, the amounts of part-time Linking Words
work
and unemployment were rarely observed differences. Use synonyms
However
, in postgraduates, the amounts of part-time Linking Words
work
and unemployment were significantly Use synonyms
shown
Verb problem
apply
differences
. Meanwhile, voluntary Replace the word
different
work
was not popular for Use synonyms
both
students.Use synonyms
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "further".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 85%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words work, number, both with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amounts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "differences" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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