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In the past, when students did a university degree, they tended to study in their own country. Nowadays, they have more opportunity to study abroad. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this development? Zhaina

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Previously,
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 pursuing higher education were more likely to attend universities in their home countries.
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, nowadays there are more opportunities for them to study in foreign countries.
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 trend has many advantages, it
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 comes with some disadvantages. One main advantage of studying abroad is that
students
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 can gain a global perspective. Being in a foreign country allows them to experience different cultures, which helps them develop a better understanding of diversity.
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, studying in multicultural nations like Australia or Canada improves
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 communication skills and teaches them how to adapt to different environments.
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, foreign universities often provide better quality education and offer advanced facilities, which are sometimes not available in the student’s home country.
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 helps
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 to enhance their knowledge and gives them more career opportunities in the future.
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, there are several disadvantages of studying abroad. The first problem is the cost. Tuition fees and living expenses in foreign countries are very high, which makes it difficult for many
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 to afford.
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, a year of study in the United States can cost tens of thousands of dollars, which puts pressure on
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 and their families.
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,
students
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 may face cultural and language barriers when they move to a new country.
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 can lead to homesickness and stress, and sometimes they might not
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 to focus on their studies. In conclusion, studying abroad offers many benefits like better education and cultural exposure, but it
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 has challenges
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 as high costs and cultural adjustment.
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 should carefully consider these factors before making a decision.

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