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The given line graph depicts the needs of enquiring that the Tourist Information Office received within six months starting from January 2011 in a city.

The given line graph depicts the needs of enquiring that the Tourist Information Office received within six months starting from January 2011 in a city.
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The given line graph depicts the number of
enquiries
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 received by the Tourist Information Office through three methods in person, by letter/email, and by telephone over six months from January to June 2011 in a city. The data is measured in the number of
enquiries
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.
Overall
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, it can be observed that
enquiries
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 made in person and by telephone increased steadily throughout the period,
while
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 those by letter/email declined sharply. By the end of the period, in-person
enquiries
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 became the most popular method. Among the lines, in-person
enquiries
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 gradually rose from 400 in January to 1,900 in June, showing a consistent upward trend without major fluctuations.
In contrast
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, telephone
enquiries
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 followed an uneven pattern, starting at 900, dipping slightly to 800 in February, and
then
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 rising steadily to 1,600 by June. Meanwhile, letter/email
enquiries
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 showed a significant decline, falling from 750 in January to 350 by the end of the period. In conclusion, the graph highlights that people preferred making
enquiries
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 in person over time,
while
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 reliance on letters/emails decreased significantly.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words enquiries with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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