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Exercise 1 - Task One Pineapple exports The charts show world pineapple exports by the top three pineapple-producing countries in 2009 and 2019, and a breakdown of the cost to the consumer of each pineapple in 2019.

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The first bar chart illustrates the exports of the three countries producing
pineapple
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 in 2009 and 2019 ,
while
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 the pie chart shows the proportion of
pineapple
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 in 2019.
Overall
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 , it is evident that
country
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 A dispatched the highest amount of
pineapple
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 compared to
other
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the other
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 two countries ,
whereas
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country
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 C had the lowest export of
pineapple
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. In terms of the pie chart , there was approximately 10 % of
pineapple
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 tonnes
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were exported from
country
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 A in 2019 ,
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 just above 1 % were exported in 2009 and there was a significant difference between these two years in producing
pineapple
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.
Nevertheless
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 , countries B and C produced a small amount of
pineapple
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 in 2019 which was nearly 2 tonnes and well under 1 tonnes respectively.In 2009 there was a noticeable difference in dispatching between
country
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 B and A ,
country
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 B export was higher than
country
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 c which was well above 4. Distribution and retail had the highest percentage in cost per
pineapple
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 peaking at 35% ,
while
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 international transport and import licenses had roughly the same amount of cost .
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 the lowest breakdown was considered to be in taxes and producers which were 4% and 5% respectively.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words pineapple, country with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 2 times.
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