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The table shows the amount of money given to developing countries by the USA, EU countries and other countries from 2006 to 2010

The table shows the amount of money given to developing countries by the USA, EU countries and other countries from 2006 to 2010
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This
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 table illustrates the number of
money
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 that
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USA
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the USA
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, EU and other
countries
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has
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 given to OECD
countries
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, between the years 2006 and 2010.
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, throughout the years, all
countries
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inclined
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increased
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 the
amount
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 of
money
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 that they gave.
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USA
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The USA
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 took the lead with
significant
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a significant
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amount
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 meanwhile
european
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European
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 and other
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countries's
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countries
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 was relatively low. At the beginning of the timeline,
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USA
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the USA
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 was the top country which gave the most
amount
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 of
earning
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earnings
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 with 9.8 million
while
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 other
countries
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was
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 the lowest with 2.8 million. Eu was
approximatly
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approximately
 the same with
ratio
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a ratio
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 of 3.1.
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, other
countries
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 faced with fluctuations. The
money
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 ascent
untill
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until
 2009 to 3,5,
then
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descented
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descended
descend
 by 3,2.
In addition
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,
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USA
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the USA
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 experienced
gradual
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a gradual
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 rise climbing to 20.3 in 2010.
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, other
countries
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 almost stayed stable and not
experienced
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experience
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 striking upwards.
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, throughout these years there
were
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was
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 rapid growth in the
amount
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 of
money
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, more than 10 million.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words money, usa, countries, amount with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Developing countries
  • Donations/contributions/aid
  • Trends/Fluctuations
  • Economic aid
  • Humanitarian assistance
  • Comparative analysis
  • Consistent/Inconsistent contributions
  • Significant increase/decrease
  • Possible influencing factors
  • International/Economic conditions
  • Political landscape
  • Global events
  • Beneficiary sectors
  • Impact assessment
  • Future predictions
  • Financial trends
  • Regional contributions
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