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The two maps shows a small village in the west of Ireland in teh year 2000 and at present time. Summarize the information and make comparisons where relavant.

The two maps shows a small village in the west of Ireland in teh year 2000 and at present time. Summarize the information and make comparisons where relavant.
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The two maps display a small village in the west of Ireland in 2000 and
at
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the present.
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, at
the
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present, the village has developed a lot compared to the year 2000. Housing
facilities
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 in the middle of the
map
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 have been extended at the present.
Shop
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The shop
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 on the west side
remain
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 the same. The farmland
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also
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 replaced by a park. On the east side, a new
carpark
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car park
 and new housing
facilities
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 have been established. In 2000, in the middle of the
map
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, there are accommodation
facilities
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, and at the present, those
facilities
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 have been extended. At the present, the farmland, on the
north-west
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 corner of the
map
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, has been replaced by a park.
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, the number of
shop
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shops
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 on the west
conner
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corner
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 of the
map
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remain
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 the same. In 2000, there
is
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 only one hotel on the east corner. At
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present, the hotel
remain
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 in the same place,
however
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, some new housing
facilities
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 have been
establised
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established
 with a new
carpark
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car park
.
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 the south, the market is replaced by some restaurants, and the dock in the river has been removed.

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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words facilities, map with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remain" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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