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the chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate in the fasr food reasturants between 2003 and 2013.

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The bar chart illustrates the fast food
consuming
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 trends
between
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among
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 Americans, in the 10-
year
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period
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 between 2003 and 2013.
Overal
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, What stands out from the graph is that it was common among Americans to eat
ready- made
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ready-made
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 food once a
week
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 or once or twice a month. As for the
once a
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once-a-week
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week
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 figures, it can be seen that over one-quarter of people had
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life-style
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lifestyle
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 in all
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this
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 years. In 2006, it reached its highest point at around 33%.
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in
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year
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 2003 was ranked second with just over 30%. Regarding the once or twice a month, the popularity of
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 way of eating was high too. The
percantage
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percentage
 in 2003, was almost the same
with
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 once a
week
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 in the same
year
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. But it had fallen to 25% in 2006,
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 it rose dramatically to approximately 33% in the
last
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year
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. As regards the several times a
week
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, it is visible that the numbers are almost half of the numbers for the once a
week
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, in years 2003, 2006 and 2013. Which would be respectively around 15%, 20% and 17%. If we look at the
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proportions
proportion
 of
the a
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 few times a
year
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, it was approximately 13% in 2003. It witnessed a slight rise to 15% in 2006 and did not change in 2013. The pattern for both categories the every day and the never was the same in all these years
mantioned
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mentioned
. In the first
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year
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 number for the never was 5%
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 just under 5% eat fast food every day. In 2006, it
drroped
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dropped
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 to 2.5% and
had
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remained steady
utill
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until
till
still
 2013.

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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words week, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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