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The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate at fast-food shops between 2003 and 2013. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate at fast-food shops between 2003 and 2013. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The provided bar chart illustrates how many
times
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 American citizens visit
fast food
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fast-food
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resturants
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restaurants
 from 2003 to 2013.
Overall
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, the
consuming
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 rate
for
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the
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fast food was the highest in the middle groups, including the individuals who used to
eats
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eat
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 once a
week
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, and once or twice a month
are
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demonestrating
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demonstrating
the highest proportions in comparison to other
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groups
.Followed by a few
times
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 a year and several
times
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 a
week
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.
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, the lowest rate
observed
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 in the first (
Eevery
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every
 day) and the
last
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 (Never) categories. In detail, among the highest groups once a
week
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 and once or twice a month, 2006 and 2013 respectively, exhibited
a
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 highest and balanced visits which showed more than 30%. In the case of a few
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 a year and several
times
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 a
week
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, the former represented more than 15% and 2006 outperformed the other years. The latter
where
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 15% for all years except for 2003 dramatically decreased.The
every day
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everyday
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 and never categories are the
most low
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 in rate which
reched
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reached
 less than 5% for all years except for (Never) which was 5%.
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