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The graph below shows the monetary aid from four organizations to developing countries in four different years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features making comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the monetary aid from four organizations to developing countries in four different years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features making comparisons where relevant.
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The given line graph illustrates the
amount
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 of financial help from four
organizations
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 to third-world countries from 2008 to 2011.
Overall
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,
organization
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 B donated the highest
amount
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 of money followed by
Organization
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C
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while
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Organizations
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 A and D had the least donations level. Both
organizations
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 B and
C
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 gave 1.5
billion
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dollars
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 in 2008.
Then
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C
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 had a slight increase
while
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 B slightly decreased in 2009 before it dramatically rose to a peak at 3
billion
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dollars
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 in 2011.
In contrast
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to
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apply
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aid
amount
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 in
organizations
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C
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 which
then
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 declined to less than 1.5
billion
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dollars
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 in 2010 and remained almost steady in 2011.
Organizations
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 A and
D
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D's
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amount
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 of aid in 2008 was about 0.5
billion
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dollars
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.
However
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, it was raised in
organization
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 A
then
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 fluctuated from 2009 to 2011. The financial help in
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organization
Capitalize word
Organization
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 D declined to less than 0.5
billion
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dollars
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Linking Words
then
Correct word choice
and then
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 fluctuated as well from 2009 to 2011.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words amount, organizations, organization, c, billion, dollars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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