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Some people think that the best way to improve road safety is to increase the min legal age for driving a car or motorbike.To what extent do you agree/disagree

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Some people believe that raising the minimum legal driving age is the best way to improve road safety. On one hand, increasing the age could reduce accidents caused by young drivers who often lack experience and quick
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 skills making them more prone to mistakes.
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 factors
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 as better driver education stricter traffic laws and improved infrastructure play a more significant role. In my opinion, simply raising the legal driving age is not enough but it could be part of a broader solution when combined with other safety measures.
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Your essay clearly states your opinion, providing both sides of the argument, which is a strength in addressing the task.
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You adeptly mention several factors contributing to road safety, which shows a good understanding of the topic.
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The body paragraphs maintain a good structure, addressing different viewpoints which aids in demonstrating balanced storytelling.

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