Some people believe that universities are producing more graduates than is needed, and that less emphasis should be placed on university education. Others are of a different opinion. Discuss both views and include your own opinion.
While
some Linking Words
argues
that universities graduate more students than necessary Change the verb form
argue
and
less importance should be given to higher Correct word choice
apply
education
. Some Use synonyms
holds
the view against Change the verb form
hold
to
Change preposition
apply
this
. Linking Words
This
essay will explore both views and I will discuss each perspective and give my opinion.
On the one hand, no matter how high Linking Words
is
the number of graduates, college Unnecessary verb
apply
life
and Use synonyms
education
Use synonyms
is
a must for every student. To elaborate, university is the time when a teenager grows and learns to handle Correct subject-verb agreement
are
to live
on their own Change the verb form
living
as well as
solving their Linking Words
life
problems. It is about exploring, Use synonyms
Correct word choice
and socilizing
socilizing
Correct your spelling
socializing
socialising
while
trying to get a degree. Linking Words
For instance
, I had the most fun in my Linking Words
life
and developed myself in my Use synonyms
collage
years. It benefited me in countless ways. Correct your spelling
college
Therefore
, taking these years will cause drawbacks in a person's Linking Words
life
. Use synonyms
According to
me, the vitality of higher Linking Words
education
cannot be underestimated.
Use synonyms
On the other hand
, unemployment rates are higher than ever. Linking Words
According to
the citizens, there is no need Linking Words
for
Change preposition
to
studing
four more Correct your spelling
study
year
and Change to a plural noun
years
to
get a degree if there Fix the infinitive
apply
will be
no job opportunities for them. So, Wrong verb form
are
instead
of studying, working and getting involved in jobs that Linking Words
does
not Change the verb form
do
requires
Change the verb form
require
diploma
is much more common. Correct article usage
a diploma
For example
, in a recent Linking Words
study
it was found that many students quit their Add a comma
study,
education
and started to work. If the problem of unemployment cannot be solved, the Use synonyms
decliment
of importance given to Correct your spelling
decline
collage
will be unavoidable.
In conclusion, even though I agree with the statement that graduate numbers are ascending day by day, I think that Correct your spelling
college
collage
Correct your spelling
college
life
is Use synonyms
necassary
and it is every Correct your spelling
necessary
student
right to experience it.Change noun form
student's
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task achievement
Try to avoid repeating phrases like "this essay will explore both views" and instead mention the specific aspects you will discuss and your stance.
coherence cohesion
Improve language accuracy by correcting small errors, such as 'socilizing' (should be 'socializing'), 'collage' (should be 'college'), and 'necassary' (should be 'necessary').
task achievement
Provide more specific examples to strengthen your arguments. For instance, mentioning specific skills learned at university would enhance your point.
task achievement
The essay includes both views and presents a clear opinion, demonstrating a balanced discussion.
coherence cohesion
Your introduction and conclusion are clearly identifiable and effectively open and close the discussion.
coherence cohesion
The general structure of the essay is logical, allowing readers to easily follow your arguments.