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Millions of dollars are spent on space research evey year. Some people argue that the money should be spent on improving living standards on Earth. Do you agree or disagree?

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Recently, governments of many countries worldwide
allocate
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 millions of dollars yearly for
space
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 research,
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, some people think that
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 amounts should be devoted to
enhance
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standards
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the standards
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 of living on
Earth
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. I neither agree nor disagree with
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 opinion, as I believe that exploring
the
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space
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 is very important for the future and investing to improve
quality
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the quality
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 of
life
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 on
Earth
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 is
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 essential. On one hand,
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Earth
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 is suffering from many challenges that have affected the living standards
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 as lack of resources,
over population
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overpopulation
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, ......etc.
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, exploring
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space
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 has become crucial to save the
Earth
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 before it collapses.
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 to
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,
space
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 navigation trips have helped humans to gather more information about
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outer
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 which will support
in
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 moving
life
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 to
space
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 in the future.
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, trips to Mars have developed scientists’ knowledge about
life
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 conditions there and they started to have
plan
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plans
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 that shall help human beings to
adopt
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adapt
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 to live there.
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,
although
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 exploring
the
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space
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 is significantly important,
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,
Earth
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 is struggling with many problems which are affecting
quality
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the quality
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 of
life
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 on it.
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 of
this
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, sufficient amounts should
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 be dedicated to
improve
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improving
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 living
condition
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conditions
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 on
Earth
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.
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,
Earth
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 is suffering from climate change and high
level
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levels
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 of pollution which are endangering the lives of many people,
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, monies should be spent on solving
such
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 problems to protect the existence of humanity on
Earth
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. In conclusion, recent circumstances on
Earth
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 urge a quick movement to save
Earth
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 and to find a substitute
to
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 it.
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, governments should invest in both aspects in order to provide suitable solutions for the obstacles that the
Earth
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 is encountering right now.

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task achievement
Consider providing more specific examples or data to support your points, particularly when discussing issues such as climate change or the benefits of space exploration. This will strengthen your arguments.
coherence cohesion
Ensure smooth transitions between ideas to enhance flow and clarity. Although your essay is logically structured, some transitions could be more fluid.
task achievement
The essay presents a balanced view on the topic, thoughtfully considering both sides of the argument.
coherence cohesion
The introduction clearly sets the stage for the discussion, and the conclusion effectively summarizes the main points.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • technological advancements
  • everyday life
  • global challenges
  • climate change
  • natural disasters
  • resource management
  • scientific knowledge
  • future generations
  • educational growth
  • international collaboration
  • peace and unity
  • immediate issues
  • poverty
  • healthcare
  • urgent funding
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