Many people join distance-learning program and study at home, but some people think that it cannot bring the same benefit as attending colleges or universities does. Do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays
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, that will not
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the same as studying in person like in uni or college. In
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the reasons why I agree with that. First off, off-site learning is a fairly new concept which has been introduced
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the recent lockdowns
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coronavirus in which many peers were unable to attend physical lessons,
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clearly indicates that it is only an alternative to the traditional schooling system.
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, online learning isolates individuals from their homes giving them less access to facilities like libraries and limiting their social interaction which can lead to social anxiety and depression.
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gives the learner plentiful opportunities to be lazy, lack motivation and not attend the lessons seriously leaving the teachers frustrated and lacking control over their classrooms.
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, learning traditionally by going to facilities and attending lectures in person has been a tried and tested method of obtaining knowledge for centuries. In my experience, when I was taking online lectures during the coronavirus, I rarely took any of the lessons seriously and so did many of my classmates.
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caused my grades and my interest in medicine to plummet. In summary, attending lectures in person is deemed more beneficial
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. In my opinion, if there is no pandemic or any other adversities stopping learners from attending physical classes they should
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have no solid grounds to stay at home and take courses.

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Ensure the essay maintains a balanced perspective, considering both arguments of distance learning and traditional face-to-face education.
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