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The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical apliances and amount of time spent doing in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarises the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical apliances and amount of time spent doing in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarises the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
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The given graphs compare the
amount
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 of families with home appliances and how many hours they spend doing chores every week during the period from 1920 to 2019 .
Overall
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, refrigerators are the most used devices throughout the period,
while
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 washing machines
the
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are the
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 least
prefered
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preferred
 item.
In addition
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, by 2019 the number of
hour
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hours
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 spent
to do
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doing
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 housework decreased extremely.
It is clear that
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 refrigerators started at zero in 1920 and skyrocketed
at
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to
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 100% by 1980,
then
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,
it
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they
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 went constantly at the same percentage until finish the study.
Furthermore
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, vacuum
cleaner
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cleaners
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 represented a
similiar
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similar
 trend
as
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to
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 refrigerators, as it began at 30% and achieved
the
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apply
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100%
until
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by
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 2000.
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, washing machines remained with a stable elevation since it initiated at 40%, reached a high at 70% and in 1960
it
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finally
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 experienced a slight increase of almost 5%. In the second line graph, it can be seen that households dedicated many
hour
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hours
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 per week to domestic chores; 50 hours. Around 1980 these decreased in an extraordinary manner to
finally
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ends
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end
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 at 10 percent.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "finally".
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Vocabulary: The word "graphs" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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