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Below is a map of the city of Brandfield. City planners have decided to build a new shopping mall for the area, and two sites, S1 and S2 have been proposed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Below is a map of the city of Brandfield. City planners have decided to build a new shopping mall for the area, and two sites, S1 and S2 have been proposed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The maps
shows
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show
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 the proposal to build a new shopping mall in the city of Brandfield, and two potential locations.
Overall
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, it can be seen that
in
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apply
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the first site, S1, is in a rural area of the city,
while
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 the second location, S2, occupies a more urban position. Looking closely
to
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at
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 S1, if the shopping mall were placed there, it would be positioned
in
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 the north side of the city, the housing estate. It would have a railway coming from the north-west and a road coming from the north-east.
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, it would have the opportunity
have
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 a lake around the mall. Moving to S2,
where
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which
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 is located in the south of Brandfield, the business would be
closely
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 to the industrial site,
however
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, it would not have the lake.
In
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other
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the other
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 hand, it will be
also
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 located with the railway crossing the north-east, and having the road crossing its north-west side.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proximity
  • residential area
  • industrial zone
  • city center
  • main road
  • benefits
  • convenience
  • traffic congestion
  • accessibility
  • workers
  • compare
  • differences
  • pros and cons
  • suitable
  • analysis
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