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Many modern films and television programmes about past event and people contain a mixture of fact and fiction. Some people say this distorts the public's view of history and should therefore be discouraged. What are your views? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.

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Recently, the issue of
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a mixture
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 of fact and fiction about
history
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 has become the subject of heated debate. Some
people
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 assert that it distorts the individual’s view of
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,
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 others argue
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. Personally,
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 I believe that both
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agree with the former stand. In the following essay, the evidence supporting
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 matter will be discussed alongside relevant examples before a conclusion with my opinion. On
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 hand, nowadays, most
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 don’t feel interested
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history
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.
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, films and television programmes about past
event
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events
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 attract many
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, it leads to
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people’s
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interests
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about
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 their
history
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.
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, students can learn
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 easily compared to paper books.
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, there are many movies and dramas related
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history
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, they have many audiences and remind past
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 to
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, most
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 don’t find what is true and what is false.
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 means that
people
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 might have false knowledge about
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,
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correct
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 the answer. Having correct
history
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 knowledge is important because
history
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 contains culture and tradition. If individuals have false views, it can lead to
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 their ethnic
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 these reasons, many
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 protest to these movies and dramas. In conclusion, it is undeniable that there are a variety of opinions about
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 topic.
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, after considering
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 matter in a careful manner, each side of the debate has its reason, as discussed above.
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, I believe that movies and television programmes about
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 should not contain
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 of fact and fiction, they attract many
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Development and Support
Consider adding more relevant examples or specific details to support your points, especially when discussing the benefits or drawbacks of mixing fact and fiction in historical films.
Coherence and Cohesion
Aim for clearer topic sentences in each paragraph to improve the logical flow and structure of your essay.
Task Response
Ensure each argument is thoroughly explained and supported with examples to improve clarity and completeness.
Balanced Viewpoint
Aim to balance your arguments more effectively by discussing both positive and negative sides more equally.
Introduction
Your introduction clearly states your position and outlines both sides of the debate.
Conclusion Writing
The conclusion effectively summarizes your main points and restates your opinion clearly.
Balanced Argumentation
You attempt to provide a balanced view by considering both sides of the argument.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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