The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004.
The line graph compares three different kinds of meat and fish in terms of consumption between 1979 and 2004.
Overall
, it can be seen that, Linking Words
while
the consumption of Beef and Lamb decreased with fluctuations, the Linking Words
chicken
showed an upward trend. Meanwhile Fish slightly decreased over time.
As the graph shows. Use synonyms
Chicken
started just below 150 in 1979 and stopped at around 200 by 1989. Use synonyms
Then
, in 1994 intake of Linking Words
chicken
reached amount just under 250. Use synonyms
Finally
, in 2004 after a steady drop, Linking Words
chicken
demand attained 250 and became the most widely consumed meat. At the start of the period, in 1979 Beef was at approximately 220 and after rapid changes, it fell to 200 grams per person by 1989 and had a gradual decrease till 2004 when it dropped to just over 100.
At the same time, Lamb Use synonyms
has
started with only 150 in 1979 and slightly raised by 1984, Unnecessary verb
apply
however
after fluctuations, it Linking Words
has
experienced a drop to just under 100 in 1994, though, after a quick increase by 1999, there was a short variation till 2004 when it Unnecessary verb
apply
finally
reached nearly 60.
Fish was relatively stable in comparison with meat, and remained the least eaten product of all, though it remained relatively stable. Linking Words
First,
it started at around 60 in 1979, Linking Words
then
Linking Words
dropping
to less than 50 over time.Wrong verb form
dropped
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