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Band 2.5

Sending space crafts and astronauts into space is very expensive. It would be of greater value for the government to use the money spent on space exploration to improve the quality of life on Earth. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Sending
lots
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 of missions to explore
space
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 is a great
things
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 done by humans, but it comes with
really
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a really
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 high
expensive
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apply
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cost that it would be better to
be
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spend to improve the quality of
life
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peoples
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people
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 on
earth
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Earth
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. And do I agree
on
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 that or disagree, I would say that my opinion is to continue
do
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to
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 search and send crafts
mission
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missions
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 to learn more about our planets.  Sending
space
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mission
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missions
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 to explore our planets will
required
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lots
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 of
invistments
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investments
investment
 money from
goverenments
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governments
 or investors, But there is
a
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great value when we learn more about our planets.
As
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 example when they send astronauts they give each one a case to study, like the effect of gravity on
space
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 or how plants can grow when they are far
a way
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away
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 from
earth
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Earth
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. Developing the satellite and internet
whitch
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which
 can help to increase our
life
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 quality.
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 my ideas.
Space
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exeploration
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exploration
 requires
lots
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 of money from
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the goverenmet
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goverenmet
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government
governments
,
while
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 some say
this
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 money should be
spending
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spent
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 only on earth to increase our
life
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 quality, but in
fact
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 it's an investment that
bring
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brings
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 us
lots
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 of things that lead to
improve
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improving
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 our
life
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 and our
civelazation
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civilization
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Language Accuracy
Improve spelling and grammar, such as 'expensive,' 'investment,' 'government,' 'civilization,' and 'exploration.'
Development of Ideas
Provide more specific examples to support your points, such as technological advancements or specific projects that benefited Earth due to space exploration.
Task Achievement
Clarify your main ideas further, as some points are not fully developed, like the benefits of learning about our planets or improving internet quality.
Coherence and Cohesion
Improve the organization by clearly separating ideas into paragraphs, with each paragraph focusing on a single aspect of the argument.
Task Achievement
The essay presents a clear stance on the topic by supporting continued space exploration.
Coherence and Cohesion
The conclusion restates the main argument, reinforcing the position taken.
Task Achievement
The essay mentions relevant aspects such as the effect of gravity and technological developments like satellites and internet.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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