The charts below show the growth in the population in some of the world’s largest cities over three time periods. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the growth in the population in some of the world’s largest cities over three time periods. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar charts compare the rise in the
population
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in five different countries between 1970 and 2010.
Overall
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, it is readily apparent that countries had a growth.
Tokyo
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had the highest proportion of the
population
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throughout the period,
while
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Jakarta had the lowest percentage of the
population
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throughout the
year
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.
To begin
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with,
Tokyo
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, New York and Shanghai had the largest proportion of the
population
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at the beginning of the
year
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(16%, 18% and 12%, respectively).
Moreover
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, Bombay and Jakarta had the smallest share of the
population
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with 5% and 2% in 1970. By 1990, countries had a growth.
Tokyo
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had a considerable rocket to 23% and New York climbed minimally to 16%. They had the largest contribution to the
population
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in the world.
In contrast
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,
Tokyo
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had risen noticeably to 27% in 2010,
whereas
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New York soared slightly to 17%
at the end
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of the
year
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.
Furthermore
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, Shangai went up significantly from 13% to just over 20% in 2010,
however
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, Bombar had an increase suddenly from 12% to 26%
at the end
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of the
year
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.
Finally
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, Jarakta had doubled from 9% to 18% in 2010
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "at the end".
Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words population, tokyo, year with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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