The line graph below shows the percentage of tourists to England who visited four different attractions in Brington
The line graph below
presented
the percentage of travellers to England who visited four different Wrong verb form
presents
attrations
in Brighton.
Correct your spelling
attractions
Overall
, The Pavilion was the most popular place Linking Words
for visiting
compared to the art gallery which Change preposition
to visit
was gain
the least attention in 2010. Despite an art Wrong verb form
gained
shows
gaining Correct subject-verb agreement
show
a
popularity Remove the article
apply
as well as
a pavilion at nearly Linking Words
same
ratio Correct article usage
the same
initially
, it significantly dropped the number of visitors Linking Words
at the end
.
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At
the beginning, The festival faced the highest Change the preposition
In
the
number of tourists at 30 per cent Correct article usage
apply
while
the pier was the lowest one at 10 Linking Words
percentage
. Between 1980 to 2000, the proportion of people visiting the special events slightly decreased and remained steady until 2010. Replace the word
per cent
However
, the boat spot fluctuated dramatically from 1980 to 2005 until its peak at 23 per cent in 2010.
In 1995, The Pavilion rose Linking Words
its
peak Change preposition
to its
almost
50 percent compared to the others Change preposition
of almost
at
the same year and Change preposition
in
then
Linking Words
decrease
Wrong verb form
decreased
dramtically
Correct your spelling
dramatically
at
35 percent in 2000. There was Change preposition
to
also
a sharp escalation in art Linking Words
musium
from 1980 to 1985 but eventually Correct your spelling
museum
is
the least tourist spot at 9 per cent Verb problem
became
at
2010.Change preposition
in
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