The table below shows the causes of injuries in Australia for teenagers and the general population. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, making comparisons where relevant.

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The table below provides information about nine

cases

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of injuries for young males and females from

total

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the total

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people

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number of people

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in Australia.

Overall

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, the

bigget

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biggest

proportion of

injury

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injuries

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falls

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fall accidents

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accident

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while

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the least in exposure to heat, smoke and fire. As can be seen

that

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apply

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, the number of

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apply

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females

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female

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and males

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accident

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accidents

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in falls

cases

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was the biggest at 720 and 193,

while

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second

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the second

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highest number

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of accident

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accident

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accidents

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the complication

a complication

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complication

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complications

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of medical care

340

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were 340

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and 349

cases

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Furthermore

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, the

car

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number of car

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occupant at 232 and 186

cases

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was

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were

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higher. Meanwhile

On the other hand

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, the lowest number of

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accident

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accidents

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three

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the three

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types

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of accident

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accident

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accidents

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was under 60 people.

Firstly

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,Pedestrian, accidental

poisoing

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poisoning

and exposure to eat, smoke and fire.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.

Vocabulary: Replace the words cases, accident with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "falls" was used 2 times.

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5
Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
2
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
22
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

115 words

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